Monday, 12 October 2015

Commentary on Controversial topic 09/10/15

Commentary on Controversial topic


Both blogs are discussing the topic of capital punishment (more commonly known as 'the death penalty') which is a highly controversial topic so the target audience of these blogs are people who have strong opinions of this subject or are interested in learning more. Furthermore, the audience might be people who are following the blog so regularly read the posts no matter the subject. Both bloggers are adults and have been educated to quite a high standard and I have portrayed his by the fact that each blogger uses Standard English and sophisticated language. The high quality of English would surprise the receiver as they would expect blogs to be very informal but as they are not, their opinions seem more credible. However, the bloggers are young adults and I depicted this by the way the bloggers are arguing with each other and appear to dislike the fact that their opinions are going unheard which implies an air of immaturity. Despite this, Blogger 2 can be seen as more informal than Blogger 1 as they use contractions such as "couldn't". Blogger 2 could be doing this purposefully to make their blog seem more approachable and friendly as some audience could find too formal tests to be daunting or a possible source of humiliation if they cannot understand all the words.

Blogger 1's first publishment has a title "Crazy, Cuckoo Capital Punishment

The primary purpose of the blogs is to persuade their audience to agree with their point of view. Blogger 1 uses triplets such as "far, far, far" when describing their opinion. The repetition of "far" emphasises the preposition and ensures the sentence is memorable to the reader by making it stand out which implies that the sentence is important. I have made the text producer very passionate about the subject so they could be seen as admirable to the audience and they may repsect the text producer's views more. On the other hand, Blogger 2 uses cliche phrases such as "an eye for an eye" when describing their opinion. I did this because it makes the text seem more relatable to its receiver and ensures they will be able to understand Blogger 2's point of view clearly. Furthermore, the use of terminology the reader will be familiar and comfortable with will make the audience more likely to take Blogger 2's side as they seem more like a friend.

Even though the primary purpose of the blogs is to persuade the reader, the secondary purpose is to win the argument between the two blogs. Blogger 1 even quotes Blogger 2 "would you like to be responsible" and turns the phrase round to support their point. I did this because the use of the personal pronoun "you" indicates that the argument is much more personal and even though Blogger 1 is still trying to persuade the text receiver, they are also trying to persuade Blogger 2. The personal pronoun gives the text a more aggressive tone as Blogger 1 is purposefully singling out Blogger 2 and quoting their argument in a condescending manner. This aggressiveness starts a tonal shift in the way Blogger 2 writes; instead of using facts to back up their argument, Blogger 2 talks about their personal opinion in a rather aggrieved manner. For example, Blogger 2 talks about how "Losing a loved one is an awful event" and I wrote this because the text producer has had a personal experience with someone close to them being murdered. This means that Blogger 2 wrote about this topic because of lack of closure and want of revenge to their lost one because they are still grieving.


I used alliteration in both blogs to help make their points more effective. Blogger 1 uses the alliteration of "immoral, ignorant and inhumane". The repetition of sounds draws the reader's attention to the sentence which is also greater emphasised by the fact that it is also a triplet. The alliteration of the first letters of the words means that the only emphasis is on the first syllable of the words which shortens them and makes them sound crisp and snappy. Similarly, Blogger 2 uses the alliteration of "malicious, malevolent monsters" which is also a triplet. The alliteration of "malicious" and "malevolent" means the emphasis draws out the firsts syllable and makes it seem playful. However, "monsters" does not fit the pattern of sounds so the last word is emphasises because Blogger 2 has such a strong and negative opinion about murderers than they do no believe them to be huan anymore.

Additionally,in both blogs I also use rhetorical questions. Blogger 1 uses rhetorical questions such as "is this not the definition of the death penalty?" which is short and direct. The question is specifically about the topic the text producer is taking about and the rhetorical question appears to be directed at the target audience and ensures they question their opinion. It is a subjective question and therefore the text producer as purposefully made the tone expectant that the target audience agrees so the question is subtly persuading the audience to take their side. In comparison, Blogger 2 uses rhetorical questions when talking about why "innocent people have to pay to look after evil murderers" as the text producer believes they should be using the money, that they believe is wasted, on "themselves and their family". This rhetorical question is also attempting to make the audience question their own opinions on the subject; however, the sentence is very prolonged so loses the commanding tone and therefore it is less persuasive. This implies that the text producer is less experienced than Blogger 1 and could have allowed their personal feelings to influence their work. This is suggested by the fact that Blogger 2 is replying to Blogger 1's opinion so their answer could have been written in the heat of the moment and affected by emotions such as anger.

Tuesday, 6 October 2015

Controversial Blog-Death Penalty 05/10/15

Crazy, Cuckoo Capital Punishment

Blogger 1:
I cannot believe that in some countries they still have the death penalty! This is not the Middle Ages anymore; we should not condone the murder of each other as that is just encouraging violence. Do they not understand how barbaric that appears to other nations? Even in a developed country like America, some states still have the death penalty; in 2012 there were 43 executions and 77 death penalties in America. These are absolutely horrifying figures! If these figures are not enough to terrify you, other countries are far, far, far worse. For example, in Iran there were at least 314 executions in 2012 and at least 79 death sentences. I would hate to live in a country where some live in fear of death. It is not right. It must be stopped.
http://www.amnestyusa.org/our-work/campaigns/abolish-the-death-penalty?id=1011005
Blogger 2:
Why would you hate to live in a country with the death penalty? Surely it would make you feel safer knowing that the criminals couldn't commit another crime if they're dead? The only criminals that are executed are the ones that have killed people and I believe they deserve to die after doing something so unforgivable as that. They are malicious, malevolent monsters. Haven't you ever heard of the phrase 'let the punishment fit the crime' or 'an eye for an eye'? If a murderer serves his time in prison and is then let out, they then have the opportunity to kill again. For example, Kenneth Allen McDuff was an American serial killer who was imprisoned for killing people and then killed more people after being let out of prison. More people could have been saved than killed if McDuff was executed. Innocent lives were wasted. Would you like to be responsible of innocent people dying if you help get rid of the death penalty?
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kenneth_McDuff
Blogger 1:
I can understand your thirst for vengeance for the victims of the heart breaking crime that is murder. However, how can you be completely sure that the person you are executing is actually guilty? What happens if you seem to have all the evidence in the world that points to a person being guilty of murder but it turns out they were cleverly set up? Would you like to be responsible of an innocent person dying if you did not help get rid of the death penalty? Furthermore, it is against the law in America to execute someone if they are mentally insane. However, it is estimated that 5-10% of prisoners on death row in America have severe mental illnesses. Consequently, it should unconstitutional to kill them as they were not aware of right or wrong at the time or of the consequences their actions would have. Therefore, the death penalty is killing people who do not deserve to die and needs to be stopped. Now.
http://www.deathpenalty.org/article.php?id=53
Blogger 2:
Life is precious and needs to be protected. Innocent people don't deserve to have that gift taken away from them and the perpetrators should be punished severely. Losing a loved one is an awful event but it's even worse if it was intentional and with malice. In my opinion, the execution of the murderer gives the victim's friends and family the closure they need to grieve in peace. Also, the death penalty is less expensive than life in prison and also decreases the prison population. This means that taxpayers pay less of their own money looking after criminals. Why should innocent people have to pay to look after evil murderers when they could be using the money to look after themselves and their family?
Blogger 1:
If someone killed another person in cold blood and it was premeditated then that would be murder. However, is this not a definition of the death penalty? You set a date to kill someone and the executioner does not feel too much remorse as the person 'deserves it'. How sociopathic can a society get if they condone this? Also, if they serve life in prison then they would definitely have had enough of punishment and would not want to do something to serve time again. Furthermore, it is a common belief that people can learn from their mistakes and change for the better. Why could this not be possible for killers? For example, in 1979 Stanley Williams was sentenced to death after being convicted of four murders. He was the co-founder of a violent and powerful gang in Los Angeles called Crisps who were responsible for hundreds of murders. However, about five years later, Williams underwent a religious conversion and consequently wrote many books and created many programs which encouraged peace and fought against gang violence. He was nominated for the Nobel Literature Prize four times and the Nobel Peace Prize five times. This proves that convicts can turn away from lives of violence and become new people. Despite the fact that Mr Williams was no longer dangerous for society, he was still executed in 2005. Can you see how numerous people could view this punishment as morally wrong? There is no black and white case for capital punishment. The majority of prisoners on death row have been either physically or sexually abused in their lives. This would obviously play a big part in their lack of morals. However, if they were given therapy and were taught how to function properly in society, why could they not be given a second chance? Mr Williams gave so much good to society after he acquired new morals and if it were not for the death penalty he could have contributed so much more. Capital punishment is immoral, ignorant and inhumane. Help us stop it.